读写任务作文指导new.ppt

读写任务作文指导 Guidance for task-based writing,考情分析,【命题透视】,附2013年读写任务命题形式、命题特点、命题话题见下表,考情分析,【命题透视】本题考场上得分率两极分化相当明显。其中，全省零分作文卷达到6万多份，占全省的10%；014分卷占全省的64%。然而2025分的优秀卷只有5.4%，满分卷共42份。所以全省读写任务写作平均分10.87分，相比2012年的省平均分11.94分降低了1.07分。,考情分析,【考情反馈】学生习作中的主要存在问题从2013年高考英语评卷场上反馈的情况来看，大部分考生在读写任务写作中存在如下问题：1、英语单词拼写错误频繁2、概括部分要点不完整；3、英语句子结构混乱，缺乏用完整的句子来表达的能力4、原文理解出现了偏差，导致歧义5、相当一部分考生东拼西凑，抄袭原文、原句6、中国式英语思维表达明显7、生搬硬套写作模板，致使写作内容空洞8、要点理解不到位，出现离题现象9、结构笼统，段落不分明，致使评卷教师难以找到考生的写作要点。10、写作段首缺乏主题句11、写作考生思维没有拓展，导致文章内容空洞，篇幅短小。12、段落篇章缺乏语篇过渡词，致使上下文连贯性不强。,考情分析,【评分要求】概括（30字左右）（评分细则）1.完全不理解地照抄原文，连人称都不改的（0分）2.机械死板地照抄，不改变原文顺序（1分）3.改变主语或宾语，灵活性地抄（2分）4.改变原文句子的结构，创造性地抄（3分）5.改变句子、用词，重新排列组织（4-5分）自主写作（120字）1.感想，语言，内容，连贯性；2.语言为主，内容的相关部分，综合考虑连贯；3.首先看语言是否合格；4.内容：读后感；5.用了阅读理解中的素材不算抄袭；6.内容偏离的时候以语言为主。,【读写任务的概括】概括包括两个部分：主题句和支撑句。前者统摄后者，主题句是关键。概括的形式：主题句支撑句。,题型探究,我们分析一下学生习作，看看学生习作中存在什么问题，如何改进。【学生习作1】Della and Jim get married.In Christmas,They sold their favorite things,so that they can buy gift for each other【学生习作2】As is shown in the story,Della and Jim love each other deeply.However,they were in a tough life.When Christmas was coming,Jim bought an expensive comb for her long hair by selling his golden watch.Della bought a gold watch chain for his golden watch by cutting her hair.Although the gifts were useless,they are the best gift for them.,题型探究,【学生习作3】Della and Jim broke away from their families to get married which makes they digesting the hardship of life.Christmas was coming.,they were thinking of good gift for each other.eventually,the gifts were useless for each other.But in fact they got the best gift because of their sweet love for each other.【学生习作4】Because Christmas was coming,Della and Jim were thinking of a good gift for each other.However,they bought useless gifts.But in fact they got the best gift and love.,题型探究,【学生习作5】Poor as they were,Della and Jim both bought an expensive Christmas gift for each other at the cost of their precious possessions.Eventually,although the gifts were both useless,they got the best gift-love.,【参考范文】,1、主题句：The text is about a gift of love between Jim and Della.2、支撑句：Both of them sold what they liked best to buy a gift for the other.The gifts were in fact true love to each other.,备考策略：,写作步骤与技巧：(1)了解大意做题之前，要浏览短文，了解大意。如通过浏览标题、首段及各段首句等。(2)找关键词找关键词就是找记叙文的六个要素。一般说来，任何事情或事件(what)都会有时间(when)、地点(where)、可能涉及的人物(who)、原因(why)、经过(how)、结果(result)。在阅读时可以将关键词画出来。,(3)组词成句依照原文内容，将上述关键词扩展成完整的句子。(4)连句成篇根据事情发生的顺序，用适当的连接性词语，将上述体现文章要点的句子连接起来，成为一篇较为通顺的短文。,阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。A long time ago,there was a huge apple tree.A little boy loved to come and lay around it every day.They loved to play together.As time went by,the boy had grown up and no longer played around it.One day,he came back and the tree excitedly invited him to play.But the boy said he needed money to buy toys.“Sorry,I have no money,but you can pick all my apples and sell them，”said the tree.The boy did as told and left happily but never came back.The tree was sad.,小试牛刀：Lets have a try,Many years passed,the boy returned and told him he had to make money to build a house for his family.The tree happily offered its branches for the boys house.With the branches,the boy left,satisfied.The tree was again lonely and sad.Then one hot summer day,the tree was delighted to see the boy back again.“Come and play with me！”the tree said.“I am sad and getting old.I want to go sailing to relax myself.Can you give me a boat？”“Use my trunk to build your boat.”The boy cut the tree trunk and went sailing but never showed up for a long time.The tree was happy,but it was not true.,Finally,the boy returned after he left for so many years.“Sorry,my boy.But I dont have anything for you any more.No more apples for you.”the tree said with tears.The boy replied that he was too old and needed nothing but a place to rest.“Good!The old tree root is the best place to lean on and rest.Come,sit down with me and rest.”The boy sat down and the tree was glad and smiled with tears,写作内容1以约30个词概括上述寓言故事的要点。2以约120个词，从“小男孩”、“苹果树”或者“小男孩和苹果树”之间任选一个角度发表你的看法，并包括如下要点：(1)谈谈你对他或他们行为的评价，并说出理由；(2)你读后的感受与启示。,写作要求1可以使用实例来支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容论述，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。2标题自拟。评分标准概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。,Possible version An apple tree gave whatever a boy needed,sparing no effort,after which,it felt lonely after his leaving.It was when they were both old that the boy returned to stay with the tree again.,应试点睛,2013年3月广州一模分析会专家明谏：“高富帅是提升高考英语写作成绩的突破口”。考生应该努力通过作文亮点的创设，使自己的作文高端，大气，上档次，从而给阅卷老师创造良好的心理感受和主观印象。如果想关注“闪光”亮点，做好衔接，用好词汇与短语，可以使用以下方法：,应试点睛,1 合理使用非谓语动词、定语从句、状语从句、名词性从句、强调句、倒装句、含有with复合结构的句子以及it开头的句型。很多中学英语中的语法现象可以在保证正确性的情况下大胆尝试。如：It is wildly believed/thought/accepted that knowledge is power.Only in this way/by doing that can we do/will something happen,应试点睛,2 适当用被动代替主动，这样能更客观地反映事实。如：用“Attention should be paid to”来结尾会比“We should pay attention to”更好。3 在阐释观点时有一句话重复率非常高：“I subscribe to the view/opinion that-”，这种表达很容易让你的作文从众多的考卷中脱颖而出、夺人眼球。4能用短语不用单词，短语的使用也是彰显写作功力的一种极佳方法。它的优势：(1)增加文章亮点；(2)减轻自己写文章总是寥寥数语凑不够字数的痛苦，使自己的自信心和自尊心获得满足。如：用“it occurs to sb that-”来代替“think”会更好一些。,应试点睛,5 多用词义具体的实词，少用虚词，这也是一个制造亮点的好方法。如：表示一个人“好”可以使用generous,humorous,interesting,smart,gentle,warmhearted,hospitable等具体化的词汇等。6 在议论文写作中适当运用谚语，这也是给文章增色的手段之一。如：As a popular saying goes,“Every coin has two sides.”As is known to all,“No pains,no gains.”,Practice makes perfect,Translation:1.假如我是那个男孩，我不会提出这些无理的要求。（虚拟语气）_2 虽然树很平凡，它是爱和无私的象征。（as倒装句）Ordinary as the tree is,it is a symbol of love and unselfishness.,Had I been the boy,I would not have made such unreasonable requirements,Practice makes perfect,Translation:3一个人应该过独立的生活是一项必需的能力（It形式主语/essential）_4.我们应该向父母表达爱，无论它是多么微小。（however 倒装）,It is an essential ability that a person should live an independent life,we should show our love to our parents however/no matter how little it is,Suggestions:,1、读写任务的写作最好写成四段式的文章。2、正文如要举例事例时最好选取典型、突出的例子，并要考虑时态。3、正文如要陈述观点并解释原因时，先要摆出自己的观点，并提供两、三个原因。4、最好在结尾进行小结。,温馨提示,1、保持卷面整洁,漂亮的字体，干净整洁的卷面会使人赏心悦目，比字迹潦草、卷面脏乱的作文至少有2-3 分的差距。如需改动，可用笔画斜线进行删除。,2、不留白板,根据高考评分原则和标准，只要能写出一些和试题要求相关的词和句子，就不至于得零分。,3、积累写作素材,多读多背范文，特别是涉及社会热点的文章，通过学习范文掌握一些词汇、句型，积累一些典型事例和名言警句，分析作者的观点。,